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4th Wall Page 1 by BrianDanielWolf 4th Wall Page 1 by BrianDanielWolf
First page for a comic I collaborated with the super-awesome :iconmyhatseatpeople: - I did the lines, she did the colors. For a project spurred by late-night conversations, we did pretty good.

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Kaijuu-Kai Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2012  Student General Artist
The way the two characters are in separate panels at the top made me want to read one column of speech bubbles and then the other.
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BrianDanielWolf Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2012  Student Digital Artist
Good point! Any tips on how to encourage reading one character's bubble and then the other?
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Kaijuu-Kai Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2012  Student General Artist
I'm not really sure, but maybe if both sets overlapped the gutter and there was more staggering the bubbles? Like put more room between the "Hey Hats" and "What are we doing..." and pushed her "Yeh?" bubble in closer between them, but if you did it that way, you might not have room for so much dialog. Maybe you could make the line of bubbles more diagonal, like shoving "You mean wasted" right up under "Yep, and we all got together..." it and moving "same thing" a little to the right?

You could probably just mess around with it for a little while and come up with something better than I just did, haha.
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BrianDanielWolf Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2012  Student Digital Artist
Ahh, I totally getcha. Thank you so much for taking the time to write this!
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Kaijuu-Kai Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2012  Student General Artist
I hope it helps! Thanks for taking my criticism well, I tend to give it even when it's not asked for and I realized later you didn't.
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BrianDanielWolf Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2012  Student Digital Artist
Hey, I'm always looking to improve, so any advice that helps me get there is okay in my book. Hope you like the rest of the comic!
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